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Little Red
mylittleredgirl
19 April 2004 @ 12:00 am
first drabble ever!  
I hereby eat everything I've ever said about never writing a drabble. My new word processor counts words as I go, so I pretty much had to :)

elly427, consider it an angst down payment.

As always, let me know what you think!

TITLE: "Two Words"
RATING: PG
CATEGORY: drabble, Sam/Jack, future, angst, romance
SPOILERS: "Heroes," "In the Line of Duty"
LOVE TO: besyd beta'd, and rules.

SUMMARY: One in five pregnancies ends in miscarriage.


In two words it was over.

"I'm sorry."

The familiar beeps and whirrs of the infirmary faded in and out with the sedative she'd been given. Words barely reached her, hushed and impersonal through the curtain. 'Gate travel. Naquadah. Protein marker.

Jolinar. Sam longed bitterly for Janet, for a doctor who got it.

They were just getting used to the idea.

A man parted the curtain, and her heart choked. He didn't ask.

He already knew.

"I'm sorry," she whispered, like it was her fault.

In two steps Jack reached her, and held her like he would never let go.


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ellyelly427 on April 19th, 2004 05:23 am (UTC)
Y'know, I love that I get a mention whenever you write angst. Makes me look good. ;P

Love this. Love them. You're so good at them broken.
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Little Redmylittleredgirl on April 19th, 2004 05:35 am (UTC)
You're so good at them broken.

Which is so sad, because really, I just want them to FINALLY get together and be sickeningly cute (according to Daniel, at least) and burn pancakes together in their pajamas.

But thanks :) And hey, I'm excited to know that someone will *read* my angst and not get mad at me for breaking them!

-- Little Red, who at least has never broken them permanently, yet.
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Tammy - never give up, never surrender: SG1 - S/J Burn - besydbesyd on April 20th, 2004 01:41 pm (UTC)
burn pancakes together in their pajamas

Ow! But Hee!
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Michelle K.jemster on April 19th, 2004 05:59 am (UTC)
Very nice! ;-)
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Little Redmylittleredgirl on April 19th, 2004 06:17 am (UTC)
Thanks :)

And... *looks up at icon*... why is everyone running about with "I'm a shipper, dammit" icons lately? Is this a catch phrase I need to be aware of if I'm going to be cool?
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Michelle K.jemster on April 19th, 2004 06:56 am (UTC)
Because woodface made some and we jumped. :-)
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nenya_kanadka on April 19th, 2004 07:58 am (UTC)
Sob!
Why must you do this? Make me get all sobby and everything. :D

Mind you, you do it rather well. On deep and prolonged consideration, I shan't shoot you with this phaser compression rifle I stole from Janeway.

Much love,

Nenya
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Little Redmylittleredgirl on April 20th, 2004 03:45 am (UTC)
Re: Sob!
I shan't shoot you

*bwah* well, thanks for that!!

And, sorry about the sobbiness! Next one'll be shmoopy! Maybe. Hopefully. Well, there's one in the beta-ing works but it's far from done, and *that*'s shmoopy, so I can promise that *eventually* there will be shmoopiness! And, I mean, at least they're *together* in this one... that's something...

-- Little Red, who "oooooh"ed a lot at the compression phaser rifles on Voyager
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Amanda: fall. melifelongfling on April 19th, 2004 02:48 pm (UTC)
DUDE!

*cries*
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Little Redmylittleredgirl on April 20th, 2004 03:46 am (UTC)
*kleenex*

Sorry! And hey, at least I didn't do it to D/J :-P
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jammer0307jammer0307 on April 19th, 2004 02:49 pm (UTC)
Poor S/J! That is all.

J
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Little Redmylittleredgirl on April 20th, 2004 03:50 am (UTC)
I know!! I'm thinking of installing a hot tub for them in my next fic to make it up to them ;)

I slept through most of today, hon... think I burned out yesterday on the bad-movie!gleee... so I didn't finish your beta or go on yahoo. But, tomorrow! And, this way it'll be sent out to the masses right in time to give you an ego boost for exams! Or... that's what I keep telling myself. You rock and thanks for being so patient. *hugs*

-- LR
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jammer0307jammer0307 on April 20th, 2004 03:56 pm (UTC)
Good idea hon!

Hey its no prob about the fic. I probably wouldn't have worked on it due to the massive headache I had.

*hugs*

J
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Tammy - never give up, never surrender: SG1 - Sam Hee - besydbesyd on April 20th, 2004 04:05 pm (UTC)
So, d'ya think Sam will kill the guys before the hot tub is completely installed? I can only imagine what kind of mess they'll make out on the deck ...

;^)
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Little Redmylittleredgirl on April 21st, 2004 03:09 am (UTC)
well... she might temporarily move herself to the base to avoid losing her compulsive little mind... but I'm sure she would allow it, since she'll get to relax after missions there...

-- Little Red, lost in the fantasy of it all
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Allie O'N: squeealliesings on April 19th, 2004 11:30 pm (UTC)
Oh, aww, poor them. How could something so sad three times over also be so good. There is hope. Thanks for writing a drabble.
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Little Redmylittleredgirl on April 20th, 2004 03:53 am (UTC)
You're welcome :) I had way too much fun with it... and now have *great* respect for writers who do this on a regular basis!

And there's always hope with those two. As long as they're near each other... hope :)

-- Little Red, hopeless-est romantic *ever*
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Tammy - never give up, never surrender: SG1 - Sam Kidding - besydbesyd on April 20th, 2004 01:46 pm (UTC)
I had way too much fun with it

[snickers]

hopeless-est romantic *ever*

[makes a Daniel face]
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Little Redmylittleredgirl on April 21st, 2004 03:11 am (UTC)
Hey! It was fun! Just... stressful fun! :-P
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Little Redmylittleredgirl on April 20th, 2004 03:56 am (UTC)
Thank you!! And *looks at muse* now that she's got that out of her system, perhaps I can return to the D/J goodness :)

Also: Miss you! We'll have to randomly announce some gateview chats in the near future.
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Amandalifelongfling on April 20th, 2004 02:32 pm (UTC)
perhaps I can return to the D/J goodness :)

Yes, please! :P
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mystic_isles000 on April 20th, 2004 06:25 am (UTC)
What's drabble...? I'm confuSED :(
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Little Redmylittleredgirl on April 21st, 2004 03:13 am (UTC)
Oh... it's fanfic geekiness :) It's a story of exactly 100 words.
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mystic_isles000 on April 21st, 2004 07:23 am (UTC)
awesome
thanks
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Tammy - never give up, never surrender: SG1 - S/J Deserve - besydbesyd on April 20th, 2004 04:02 pm (UTC)
So sad ... but ... so good.

[applauds]
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Little Redmylittleredgirl on April 21st, 2004 03:21 am (UTC)
[platonic kisses of gratitude and shared geekiness]
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Gena Marie: Doing it SJ--memento1genamarie on April 20th, 2004 08:33 pm (UTC)
Drabble angst
...how to make your reader cry in 30 seconds or less.

Loved it, sweetie. I have the highest respect for drabble writers--the ability to convey so much with so few words is a true art--and you clearly have the gift!

And while sad, it still has them together in the end, so I can deal :)
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Little Redmylittleredgirl on April 21st, 2004 03:26 am (UTC)
Re: Drabble angst
I have the highest respect for drabble writers

I do too! Especially after writing one!!!

And... I really can't bear to break them up. Never going to happen. Ever. *gets girlie and squeals about the forever-and-everness of Sam and Jack*

And Gena! Where have you been hiding, dude? And did you see that Amanda made a Jacob-squeee icon?
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